|Reviews for Festivals and wicker fences|
| simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 8/6/2011
"summersaults"... it's somersaults. Unless you did that on purpose as a play on words?
"where dawn used to/shatter itself overhead"... beautiful description. I love the personification.
"language used to/be as flawlessly/spoken as wind chimes"... that is such a beautiful comparison
I also wanted to tell you that your punctuation was great. It's something that bothers me in some of your pieces, but you did a great job here! The second one seemed a bit long, but it was still punctuated perfectly!
Overall good piece! Beautiful descriptions through the whole piece.
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| Ayx chapter 1 . 7/22/2011
Great poem. I'm not always a fan of using the but you have them positioned with such expertise. The exploration of 'our' language is such a beautiful term, since we do have special languages with the various people in our lives. Also, the ending was written and edited (or not) with such perfection. I could taste the fading of my own memories.