Reviews for alignment
simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 8/6/2011
I agree that it doesn't really seem like a finished piece. My only suggestion for finishing it might be to explain what the line and spaces are if they are more than universal languages.

I like the piece though. I think the whole left and right thing worked really well. I also like the nonsense/make sense. I think the piece really captures the idea of these people well and very uniquely.

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no.peace.los.angeles chapter 1 . 7/16/2011
I agree that it needs a few more lines, but I'm drawing a blank myself. Bah. I do like the last few lines that are there right now, though. Hmm. Wish I could help more! Keep writing! :)