I am really enjoying this book, your writing style is unique, and Miri is a lovely unusual protagonist. The way she always refers to her mum as Mommy is unusual too.

This chapter was very cute especially at the end (a " was missing at the end of the sentence at the beginning) but I am okay with Miri's rejection it humbles her and makes her easier to relate to. She was getting a lot of praise before and it made her a bit out of reach.

I think calling the President the most important person in the world is a bit of over kill and untrue and someone with waist-long hair would be pretty remarkable I think. And Johnny is always appearing out of nowhere with no explanation, and how come he is allowed to roam around with no Secret Service? If he randomly meets her this often now, why didn't he before?

I just had some questions, anyway, loving the book so far!

"She painted her father in his office and her mother talking to important people inside the White House and she put her and her brother outside, holding hands." I love this added detail, it highlights what you said about her brother being the only one she could play with and talk to.
Another great chapter

This was so funny! I love the way you didn't make their meeting cliche, they clicked but not in a obvious way, so cute.
It was clear that they fit well together but not in an expected over done way, this is pure class.

This is very well written, grammar and spelling is excellent. Description amazing.
A very enchanting chapter, I am excited to see how this differs from All American Girl as that book kinda sucked.

This is a fantastic story! I absolutely love everything about it, especially the characters. You had me drooling over johnny! Haha You are an amazing writer and I hope you continue at this because you are honestly very gifted.

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I loved it! I read this story a week ago but didn't have time to write a review so now I'm not so emotional, but great story! :)
Regards,
Diane.

HAVE YOU READ ALL AMERICAN GIRL BY MEG CABOT?

Oh my god I love this story. Very well written, have you considered getting it published?

Hehe there is a Facebook relationship status for that... It's complicated. Too bad his status is In a Relationship.

i enjoyed reading this!thanks so much for sharing!

Love the story. Really heartwarming and a good read when you winding down. Might want to lay low with the tears a little at the end there, though. ;)

It's a brilliant story, but I sometimes get confused with the names. When you plan for your next story, you might want to make sure that you don't have two characters with names beginning with the same letters, and you have names that match the characters age. For example, Miriam is quite an old name and so, stereo-typically you would expect it to be an old person. A way to get around this might be to ponder the thought, or to make her odd name a theme. Still, a very good story and I can't wait to read on.