Reviews for impasse
no.peace.los.angeles chapter 1 . 9/10/2011
Nicely said. I like the first stanza the best. There isn't anything I would change about it. Perfect. Keep writing! :)
classic violet chapter 1 . 8/22/2011
I love this, I can relate to it completely. Life is this long journey and there are bumps along the way, as well as accomplishments. Bravo.
Laoch chapter 1 . 8/7/2011
Just a tiny nitpick; I would suggest using some capatalization, as it appeared (to me anyway) a bit mushed together. But that's the only little thing.

This was a great piece with lots of thought and strength within it. The idea itself was great and some of the lines used really helped with visualization and all that. Great poem! :)

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simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 8/6/2011
I loved that first stanza. The descriptions were so great. I loved the first two lines. I also liked how that last line connected in with the whole map thing. Nice job.

I liked how the second stanza ended with start and the third stanza started with finishing. It was a nice way to connect the two.

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