| Reviews for Chocolate Flavored Fire |
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   Esquirella chapter 2 . 8/1/2011 Very interesting start! |
| Just Somebody chapter 2 . 8/1/2011 Wow, INTENSE! Can't wait! Update update Update! |
| just somebody chapter 1 . 8/1/2011 I love this cant wait to read next chapter! oh wait I don't have to- XP it's up going to read that now! |
| writingright chapter 1 . 7/29/2011 Hey C: I really like your story. Few things though- just tiny detail stuff but you might want to fix them. you wrote '"Whatever, I'll be up in a few, should I grab Halo?" I asked stretching a bit.' when we learn later his brother lives in the basement. Also try describing your characters. I have no idea what they look like and it would be nice to find out. This is in no way a flame or dig just some helpful little tid bits. :D I really like this though and would love it if you continued. :D |
| green grout chapter 1 . 7/29/2011 well, well - that wasnt bad. Do me the favor and keep going. Hm, not a "well rounded critque", I know. Im just so not silver-tongued today. I will work on that. Just dont give up. Its hard to work on a story consequently, I know. So heres a little support from me to you!-) |
| BTRlover17 chapter 1 . 7/27/2011 I really enjoyed this. I would definitely be interested in reading more. |
| BelieveIt chapter 1 . 7/27/2011 Hey I like it so far! I'm really interested in seeing what happens next so I hope you update soon ) BelieveIt x |