Reviews for Bring them to the horizon
in theory chapter 1 . 7/31/2011
I'm so jealous of this. Weirdly, it's not even remotely what I expected it to be about. (I just have to say now; "I like it but I don't get it" teehee). No really, the title is stunning, and that line really drives this. There's a very crisp image developing in that first stanza, although the premature ejaculation line confused me at first. Maybe because it's such a "shocking" metaphor, but it took a reread to work out how it fit.

Again, the flow works but isn't as guided as your previous pieces have been. Be careful that you don't get comfortable with it, or just embrace it fully and ignore me and run with it.