|Reviews for The Banner|
| QuietSamuel chapter 1 . 9/3/2011
ah! i liked the way u actually used historical events nd moulded them into a poetic piece... even though u used cold hard facts, i sensed a thread of emotion when u talked abt the decline... i liked ur description of the ppl just aftr rome fell... empathy mixed with a certain acknowledgement...
on the whole i get the feeling of reading an old document from new paper... its like ur putting new wine into old wineskins... id use a few older phrases nd stuff to give it an older feel...
as for the rhyming scheme, id never be able to come up with one so long, so good work on that! :D
also, u cud have elaborated a bit more on the decline part, like y exactly they declined...
| Pzychotic chapter 1 . 8/1/2011
Wow! Amazing poem! I like how you used alot of clever symbolism, especially how you included Icarus. It makes it easier to visualize. It must have been hard writing a meaningful and powerful poem that rhymes! Nice work!