|Reviews for Hallelujah, let it be|
| Caracol39 chapter 1 . 8/1/2011
I like the imagery in this poem- the line about "breathing on your own terms" is especially powerful. I also like how you embedded rhymes within the lines, and I think the way you have it spaced allows the reader to pause at certain points, which adds to the meaning of the poem (at least for me). As for the meaning itself, I'm not sure I completely understand, but I have an idea of what you're trying to say.
| ThompsonbeatsEllis chapter 1 . 8/1/2011
If this is a poem add lines, not just a one big paragraph
every statement is extremely vague and the reader doesn't now why you are saying any of this
Statements like 'sometimes it can be lonely to be me' have no impact on a person because everyone feels like that. Loneliness is not a condition particular to you - everyone expetriences it multiple times in their lifetime.
You would benefit by removing the vague and replacing it with concrete details and evidence.