|Reviews for Apple|
| MysteriousFire chapter 37 . 12/30/2013
Actually it's pretty easy to make sure everyone gets everything in this story. Just make Harold or Max point out the most obvious stuff!
This is the first time I honestly feel sorry for Teddy :(
Very touching chapter!
| CRAZEDbySUGAR chapter 31 . 12/22/2013
I have so much to read *mutters under breath*
oooo man XD I really wanted to see Max and Nym interact so badly XD
there would be so much trouble brewing...
...Nym with braided hair...I approve XD
ah Agate X3 I love how she's running this lol
pff the two Harolds meet XD GLORIOUS! Things got so confusing hahaha XD
its supposed to be a sadish chapter...but man it just makes me happy lol
| girlwhopwns chapter 1 . 12/19/2013
Promising start! It kind of reminds me of Narnia!
| Alessiel chapter 9 . 12/17/2013
Noooooo! I was so excited, I thought I was gonna get to know who killed Jimmy! You got me good xD haha
I already really like Toshiro... I think he has potential to be my favorite, but we'll see. You did say you have a looot of characters in this story later LOL
I wonder why his adoptive dad got so upset about Gunner telling Toshiro about his real dad...I can't help but wonder if he has something to hide...hmmmmm.
| Alessiel chapter 8 . 12/17/2013
RIP Donald Dx I hope that his soul made it to heaven... He just had a rough life and just wanted something better. I mean he was only a child when agreed to trade his soul...Satan really is a monster taking advantage of a poor child like that :( I'm sure God is willing to save him if he realized the error of his ways...
I love how when they first got to McRonald's all Max wanted was tacos...and then when he found he couldn't have a burger he was sad LOL But in the end he gets his tacos and his pepsi :3
Also, I love the Naruto reference haha xD Amazing!
| Alessiel chapter 7 . 12/17/2013
Uhm wow, this chapter O.O My feels...poor Donald Dx I actually feel really bad for him... What a hard life to go through at such a young age...
and when he was eating the raccoon, you wrote it well and the image in my head kinda made me feel sick to my stomach! LOL
It's sad that he almost went to the church and decided not too...maybe if he would have he wouldn't have ended up as a vessel. Crazy how one small thing can make such a huge difference.
Good chapter! Now I'm on to the next!
| Alessiel chapter 6 . 12/15/2013
So you were right, I do like Eugene xD I can't wait to read on and learn more about him...he's so much like Ryoga and it's wonderful 3 I wonder he's so mad about though...Harold dun goof'd! haha
I can't believe Monkey ate all their food! LOL It's a wonder he could even run back to Max when Ryu and Mika wanted to eat him, being all stuffed full like that xDD
I was relieved they decided to go to McRonald's at first so the monkey didn't become a meal, but man that turned out to be no good X.X I guess we know why Harold had such a bad, scary feeling about the clown his whole life xD He must have pretty good intuition about people! haha
I know I still have a looooooong way to go before I'm caught up, but this is really good so far D
| Not just Ordinary chapter 37 . 11/24/2013
Aw, poor Teddy!
| Anne Onymous chapter 21 . 11/19/2013
I wonder what the bracelet's going to do to Anita?
| Anne Onymous chapter 19 . 11/19/2013
This is getting interesting . . . except it was already.
I wonder if "Milena" is Toshiro's old friend whose name I already forgot? - Oh wait, she had brown hair and Milena is blonde.
I'm going to the next chapter to find out about that cabin. (Sorry, it's really late and so it's hard for me to think of lots to say.)
| Not just Ordinary chapter 9 . 10/28/2013
Sensear? Sincere, my friend... xD
| Not just Ordinary chapter 6 . 10/28/2013
FYI, God is spelled with a capital "G"
| Anne Onymous of the Pencil chapter 13 . 9/29/2013
Well, since I've read so many chapters, this review is going to do some topic-jumping.
Donald McRonald - weird, creepy, I felt sorry for him, and I personally think he *did* get to Heaven.
Max - though he's a bit like Harold (in Harold's dumber moments), I wasn't sure he was his son. (It should be obvious whether he was or not, with the stork, but I thought that might have been put in just for zaniness.) And then I saw the answer in reviews (who's Curtis?). I REALLY need to stop reading reviews before I've finished the story.
Harold - where is he? The story's so much more *normal* now that he's not the main character! D:
Jane - she's a bit like me. (Not sure what emoticon to add to that . . .)
Aaaand I think I'll read the next chapter instead of finishing this review.
| MysteriousFire chapter 36 . 9/29/2013
Not a clue how the 911 works... Yep, he's Max's father!
Replace Max by Curtis? I never even thought Teresa would suggest something like that! xD
Ninja's in a bad shape... Of course!
Everyone is scattered!
Max figured out Melina is behind the kidnapping? That's pretty smart of him!
Jane, put the knife away! Or is it Jane? Maybe it's Melina again...
Jane has gone insane! Is she really confusing Max with someone? She can't kill Max! Why did you stop here?
I like the chapter title after reading btw
| Anne Onymous of the Pencil chapter 5 . 9/27/2013
I like this - especially the characters. They're . . . well, original to say the least. They're surprising like real-life people . . . but weider. :D