That is simply lovely. I'd never thought immortals like that, and you did an excellent job.

Loved every bit of it. Very clear and strong sense of character. Leaves you thinking: I want to know more about this guy! Why is he like this? I hope you post the full version once its finished. Brillant piece. Only thing I'd suggest is try mixing in some short sentences in those parapraphs. But like I said, brillant. It's got fire!