Reviews for Tempting
simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 8/6/2011
Thanks for your review awhile back, sorry it took me so long to return it!

I really liked the idea here. The emotions are so realateble and you described them well. Especially the narrator's conflict. The only thing I might say is the rhyming sounded a bit sing songy and predictable.

Still, overall great piece.

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Laoch chapter 1 . 8/5/2011
Wow, that had so much emotion behind it! Excellent rhythem and rhyming which made this much more 'appealing' to follow. I could feel all the emotion you had poured into this, it was so discriptive. (Tiny nitpick: There was one spelling mistake that just confused me and I lost my track when reading. You had me instead of my in line six.)

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quasys chapter 1 . 8/4/2011
Woah. Epic. Self-reliance can always come in handy in tricky situations like these!