I really loved this. Thank you ever so much for sharing this. I hope to read more MXM from you!

I wanted them too switch though... It would be interesting if Kristian gets fucked with his own dick. Yum.

Lovely.

At just one read I felt confused by the addition of Kristian's pov without finding out something new.

Omg... XD I absolutely love this! Really, honestly in most fiction there's always one thing I can take issue with, but this was absolutely perfect! I only wish there was more, these two are so adorably awesome for each other! You really did an epic job!

Thanks for the great read,
-RPS

I really love this how they work together this story is sexy but at the same time very sweet.

well, wow...

I am really tempted to cuss but i'll leave that unsaid...

surely reading something this... hot is dangerous to do in an early morning... with my roommate beside me...

god... I have to learn from you...

anyway...

There were times that you switch point of views, but no one's perfect, I won't even be surprised if this review had multiple erors..

I've read quite a number of your works and for one thing, it would be easier to read if you were to use comprehensive words more often. Don't get me wrong, using complicated words would be useful but mashing them all in a single sentence sent my brain going all error on me and I just resort to giving up on deciphering what the character implies. Dictionary isn't my best friend either.

But admittedly, you're an amazing writer. I'll be looking forward to your succeeding works.

I like these 2. They are funny,sweet & hot, a good combination I would say. I like the style too, it's easy to read, clear & we get both POV, which is always a bonus. If you are ever inspired to write some more about them, I would love to read it!

CBD not downtown... I need to check now... yeah you being an australian or not is distracting me from hot hot man sex

Are you an Aussie? Uni... hmm I'll check your profile after I read a few more awesome chapters

The first chapter worked really well. This one feels very off-kilter by comparison, but mostly because you keep switching between third person and first person. The original switch, when it went from third person, Kristian's perspective, to first person Kristian's perspective in the form of a memory, that was alright - a little strange, but understandable enough - but later, you switch between first and third in the middle of the prose as it goes along. (And, when you switch from third to first, you also switch tenses, from past to present.)

This has probably been mentioned in the reviews already; I didn't check, but I figured I would point it out just in case, since you're a talented writer and it seemed like an odd, but fairly major mistake to make. Pick one tense and one perspective and stick with it, unless you have a very specific change in the flow of the story (as the insertion of a dream or a memory) that you want to emphasize by switching up the presentation of the story (such as changing the tense).

Your writing style is perfect. It has a great flow to it and has very descriptive words. You use sentence length variety a wee bit too much though. I can tell it's on purpose as they were executed perfectly, but I would like to see them around longer sentences. Other than that, awesome story. Your characters are great and very unique :)

So I'm done reading this and was wondering why you're so good with your description of science-y things (science-y; very intelligent, I know), looked into your profile and hey!

Great job, man.

Beautiful. I love this.

Yay! Ok so i read this story a while a go and i absolutely loved it, but i forgot its name and author, so imagine my delight when i start reading and it was sooo familiar. This is one of my all time favorites and most memorable stories in fictionpress, thanks!