|Reviews for Angels in Heaven|
| Laoch chapter 1 . 8/7/2011
Just a tiny nitpick; I think this might've come out a bit smoother had you used some punctuation (sorry, but that's one of my pet peeves...) But that's all! I absolutely love how it was written as it was so clearly put sothat I could visualize the plea that the girl is asking for. The "I'm sorry" at the end really drew it together and finished it nicely as well. This was really great!
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