Reviews for Not Even Then
YasuRan chapter 1 . 8/8/2011
I quite like the self-containment of this piece. A physical surrounding is described using sparse expressions, allowing for the sting of betrayal to truly rear its ugly head loud and clear. The straightforward tone also works for conveying the opposite of what the writer is lamenting about: lies. By exposing these for what they are, the truth really shines through.

The closing was nice and punchy. It felt strong thanks to the narrator repeating the word 'lies' but rather than commenting miserably on them, she finally makes up her mind on what to do about it ('I've had enough of lies'). Well done on this.