Reviews for heart break her
skersey chapter 1 . 8/8/2011
Interesting. I liked the word play, such as "heart break her."

"She's no one's mine" was a really awesome one, but I had to read over it a few times to get what you were trying to say. It adds to the cryptic nature of this piece for sure, but I think if you put mine in quotes it would make a bit more sense.

The verbal tenses you mention here are cool and add an analytical flare to this (objective case of she/possessive case of me/two former notes of we), but I think it also could be really confusing to some (it adds great rhythm to the poem though!)

I enjoyed reading this. Keep writing :)