|Reviews for Questions and Toxins|
| Inkspilled chapter 1 . 11/6/2011
I quite liked this. The descriptions are great, the words create a good rhythm. "And the majestic horse gallops away- we're all left in the beaten track" is a great line, but "that I know you hate with a passion?" seemed to stretch out the last thought. Great word choices, and again I really like the way you introduce and then end these. It's very effective. One other thing that I had a lot of trouble with myself, was word repetition. "But if you don't listen to a word I say/How can we all keep on singing the words?" You could replace the first 'word' with 'thing', it would sound a bit more conversational. There's other ways to get around that, too. Again, I liked this and the thoughts and concepts, you've got some really good imagery and ideas. :)
| Hearts of Solitude chapter 1 . 8/8/2011
(Too lazy to log in)
So basically, I love this. :D The emotions here are raw and powerful, and your writing style is amazing.