This is such a unique pitch! I look forward to reading more :)

Wow ! I can't express myself any other way :)

Awesome story, awesome characters, awesome writing, awesome development. Simply awesome !

I am so happy I read it, as I don't usually read mythological stories, but I fell in love with this one !

Thanks so much for writing it and posting it :)

I am trying to rationalize something that doesn't seem possible. It's something that just...can't be.

This story is as good as Harry Potter.

I think I just gave the biggest compliment I have ever given in my life.

This was beautiful. Your writing is superb.

Nice, DETAILED and totally interesting! I love the way you spun a romance with MEANING and a point to the story!

Keep it up!

~ Kiveda

I have absolutely loved your story, and I really wanted to give some feedback, so...

The universe you created is absolutely amazing. It's detailed (pun intended!) and mixes perfectly the different pantheons with a couple of twists that are purely your own - those are actually the ones who made the whole thing new and far from outdated. I always steer away from boring, clichéd mythology-based fiction, just so you know! The integration of the different gods based on the same belief intrigued me particularly, to be more precise.

Details is absolutely fantastic. There's a calm, dry, witty humour to her, and I have to admit I missed it when it got a little lost in the unfolding of the story. I know serious times call for serious mindsets, but I felt like she lost one of her most lovable characteristics along the way: Dione has a distracted, dreamy loveliness about her, and she's great as well, but as you can see from my very sentence, the two felt too much like two different people.

I have to say that Thor was my favourite 'identity' of Deus. What can I say, I like 'em spunky and brash! Though I have to say Deus has the softness Thor COMPLETELY lacked.

The plot was thick, but never confusing or annoyingly complicated, so great job! I also loved that I would have never suspected Tolus was actually Loki... truly unexpected twists are rarer to find than one might think.

I have to say, though, I found that sometimes your narration got carried away, almost dreamily; sure, that is very like Dione herself, but in some moments, before the ending chapters, it got a little overdone, kind of distracting.

Anyway, I greatly appreciated your work and I really hope you'll write more soon!

Cheers, B.

I've been reading this story for 2 days in a row, I normally would have finished it in a day, but I'm down with a cold and most times I had to re-read paragraphs to understand what was going on.

I love the detail to the story you've put in. It must have been an extensive amount of research you have done to write such an exquisite fiction. Although there were a few spelling mistakes it didn't bother me, I still absolutely love it. It's so original and something so new to what I have read before that I honestly, really enjoyed it so thoroughly. It's very rare for such a feeling to occur in me when I read a story, but I truly loved this one.

Tecna ;)

hmm... so is officina by any chance sif...thor's wife? cuz, i mean, she keeps referring to a husband, thor seems uncharacteristically caring with her, and of*fici*na backwards would be sif...

One of the best stories I have ever read. It's amazing, you should try to publish it, I promise to buy it :)You have true talent.

LOVE IT. Loves, loves, loves, especially Deus ;) Will add to favourites once I find the grocery list where I wrote down my password . . .

Holy crapsicles. I finally got internet access again and this was the first thing I read. I really liked the ending, and I enjoyed how everything turned out. I would have liked to see Hera get bitch-slapped by Dione, but other than that, I can't imagine *hehe pun* any other way this could have ended. Thanks for such an awesome story!

What a beautiful story. It was original and creative and such a breath of fresh air. I love mythology and legend so seeing this unique twist on the subject really hit a soft spot. I loved the way this plot was so intertwined with the characters and their forgotten past. It kept my attention right to the end and I was sad to see it end actually. I couldn't picture a more perfect conclusion then what you wrote for this story and especially for these characters. The detail was incredible and really paralleled the concept of her character which I found enjoyable. Overall this was very well written. Kudos. I think this just jumped to the top of my all time favorites list on FP. ;)

I really liked the ending of this one, everything felt like it tied in well, nothing was left hanging and the resolution with Loki worked out. Love the fact that by bringing him back she gave him an out, a chance to see that he doesn't have to be stuck within the cycle he finds himself in.

Great story as usual, although I wonder at us not knowing which form he's in right now, she talks about the white pants but she doesn't say that he's Zeus. But at the same time, it fits since he's no longer just different sections, he has a true name.

Which makes me wonder, were the others different gods who were integrated into him, or was he the original god Deus [since he seems to have come first if only because Dione has been around for forever] who was splintered when Deus was forgotten into three different forms instead of just forgotten and put to the background like Dione.

Fictionpress has been refusing to let me send this to you, so sorry for the massive wait.

[Whatever I imaged, caused the imagination.]

I don't understand that sentence.

I like how it feels like a creation myth but without her knowing what she's creating, she's just sort of making it as she goes along and the fact that even after she's created all of these things, it feels as if something is missing.

I also really like the way that you show her missing Zeus, like the tie in between the sky causing her distress and then her dismissing it and the fact that as she was searching and nothing around her was good enough, it was just barely enough without Thor, summoned Loki.

He knew she'd have barely enough and yet, he expected her to be happy and even knowing she was lacking something and probably felt how he felt all the time, he's still willing to keep her there.

[But I needed to know what I wanted; I needed to know so much. There was something missing in this world, something that wasn't quite right. I needed more.

Loki pulled me back as his power seemed to grow in an instant.]

Did she feed his power there? Since she needed something?

['I can't stay here without you. If you go back, you drag me with you. You take away everything I have worked for for eons. You condemn me back to a reality where I can't have what I want just because others won't let me.']

The others didn't want him to have Ragnarok either and yet he managed to make that happen, but I guess since it was in their mythology he doesn't consider it an act of free will.

Good Job, Scrabble Cat,

A really engaging, well developed and interesting story with beautiful imagery and great characters, I thoroughly enjoyed it.

Thanks and keep posting.