|Reviews for Emerald Snake|
| dietredpop chapter 1 . 8/12/2011
Ah-hah! Brilliance! I love it. I'm working on my own for the prompt, too.
| Revenge Is Bliss chapter 1 . 8/12/2011
I spotted a few minor mistakes in this piece.
After someone says something, you just put their name when you should write "Dallas said" or "Ali whispered" or something of that nature. At the end, you put "there" instead of "their". This story was a bit choppy. If you had added more details I think it would've flowed together much more nicely. The ending was very abrupt. Had you built up to that moment, it would be much more satisfying. Don't get me wrong, it was a good story. I think it could do with a lot of work, though.
| Katalina Tomas chapter 1 . 8/11/2011
This was interesting to read. :) I didn't expect the ending.
The only thing is at the end, when you write "it bit there necks." It should be "it bit their necks."
Other than that I liked it. :P
| ncbx chapter 1 . 8/11/2011
I'm so glad I told you to write this, it was AMAAAAZING! Creepy, in it's own way... and suspenseful. I like my stories best served like this. Medium rare.