Reviews for when i wake up
MentalBrink chapter 1 . 8/17/2011
"when no one is around,

i sometimes forget i'm alone.

i just start believing they never existed.

the world never seemed that big to me,

somehow the horizon was lying,

it was just a convex projection,

built to make me feel small,

to feel part of something larger."

- that really made this poem awesome :)

I feel that the rest above this bit I copied was a little too... clashy. The beginnings of your paragraphs focus on you, but they end with your thoughts of others or figments you create. With the vibe you're trying to generate, this clash probably isn't for the best.

Hope I helped :)

- MB