Reviews for Hunting The Hyena
4000kills chapter 2 . 8/24/2011
very cool(: although i think the part where u wrote 'the similarities were starting' is kinda unneeded, most readers cn figure it out
RockandSoccer chapter 1 . 8/22/2011
Really exciting, I liked it a lot! I hope more is coming!
AeQQu chapter 1 . 8/22/2011
I like this, action right off the bat is always intriguing. However, I'd slow the pace down a bit, dedicate a few paragraphs to explaining background and setting. Try and explain what's going on through people's senses; what do things look/smell/feel/sound like etc. You hit the nail on the head with explaining who Beck and Holly are, but who is Jason?

Also there are a few grammatical errors, such as starting sentences with 'But' and unnecessary capitals. Also Jason tells Beck to get him a coffee, but first says that he needs to go to the Office, where there's the possibility that he'll get fired. However since he has to go and get Jason a coffee after he's been there, the reader already kind of knows that he's not going to be fired.

Other than that it's structured and laid out cleanly and is a nice and easy read. Good job, I look forward to reading more :)