Reviews for Islands Inside Me
Angel Investor chapter 1 . 8/22/2011
I agree with the other reviewer about some of the lines being excessively wordy, but overall I really liked this poem. Keep writing.
LM4E chapter 1 . 8/22/2011
My cousin was rapping with the surround system while I was reading this so I could be wrong and I probably am, but it didn't flow as nicely throughout the entire poem. It had its moments but you need to learn to sacrifice some words and expressions, and that's the best thing you can learn as a writer. You have to learn to sacrifice your words, which I know is hard because these words are like our babies, we don't want to leave them behind. It's hard...anyway hopefully if I was wrong about it you can still take this advice. Keep writing! :)