Reviews for OrangeUtan
Inky14esset chapter 1 . 9/2/2011
Never been like that but it's nice to read things outside the box.
RandomUser674 chapter 1 . 9/1/2011
I liked the first line because it reminded me of a jack-o-latern. XD Anyway, the poem was realistic, because so many girls can fit this description. The last line was interesting as well. Sorry, I suck at reviewing in-depthly.
MakeshiftRose chapter 1 . 8/23/2011
This poem was amazing. And true! "Monkeys in clothes" I like that, lol :D
sinbin500 chapter 1 . 8/22/2011
i liked this, and i felt you captured the stereotype effectively. i would however suggest rearranging the layout of your poem as there isnt clear definition between your verses and therefore the structure is blurred - have an extra line between verses to make it clearer or something. was also slightly confused by this part:

"And though sticks and stones may leave fatal blows

And words can be the cause of much heartache."

it sounds like the 'and' in the second line is wrong - maybe consider replacing it to give the second part more meaning, as you are almost reversing the saying. if there's more contrast it'll be more poignant, if that makes sense.

imagery was good if at points a little cliche, but worked well through your poem. liked the part about the monkeys and how you linked it in with your title. good job, hope you publish more. :)

sinbin500