I have an issue with just one sentence in this chapter. I've been taking a lot of American Indian Studies classes in college and though I'm not Indian myself, I can sympathize where they're coming from when they state: "Indian people are not a Mascot", thus other people can't use stereotypes of them, otherwise those who are using those stereotypes are further aiding in their negative/stereotypical images. So, long story short, when you say: "Something that sounded like an Indian war-cry" it's very offending. I don't mean to speak as if I have stick up my butt; however, it's demeaning, degrading, and highly offensive to use "Indian war cries" in such a way that incites violence. What are you subconsciously telling people by describing that particular scene like that?

Hi! Here I am, re-reading your story after reading it just a few days ago. When you wrote: "Holy hell, Jordan. Don't you know people are supposed to gain weight in college? You're as skinny as you were when we were thirteen." Did you mean "high school" rather than "college", considering Charlotte hasn't attended college yet? Yeah, that was all.

Haha, ah the old "if he teases you, it means he likes you" cliche. This was really cute and I appreciate how you put a different spin to it.

I freaking love it! You are a great writer and are destined for great things. Keep up the fantastic job and thanks for taking time out of your busy school life! :)

Holy guacamole. This has to be one of the best stories I read on this website. Loved it.

The chapters about the fair are my favorites. I love your writing so much! I'm enjoying this story greatly, and the characters are brilliant!

This was such a short, sweet story, and I loved it! I liked how you still showed that Charlie was still her same self that she was a child under all the changes that adult Charlie has gone through. It wasn't like we had one character in the flashbacks, and a TOTALLY different one in present time. And the flashbacks flowed perfectly with each other, which was a nice surprise because I was a little hesitant about that part. I wish it was a bit longer, because it was written so well. Good job!

I am in love with this story. I don't have much to bash on, so this review will be tiny, but seriously I LOVE how you write. Just awesome.

Jordan reminds me of Janis Ian from Mean Girls. Is she possibly based on Janis?

well, honestly i really liked the story

keep writing

Loved this, it was mega cute 3

What a great story! At first I thought the flashback every other chapter would be a little confusing but it didn't a really great job of detailing the relationship between Charlie and Shane. I know Shane confessed his reasoning for the way he treated Charlie when he was younger, but I think it would be great if we also got a little bit of his perspective during their younger years. (Maybe a side story?)

I liked this. I just wished the chapters were longer and the story was longer.

Oh my god I love this story! I think you did a great job :)

I have been trolling through these sites for many years reading one unsatisfactory story to another. There was always something that put me off, and as I've gotten older my patience for things such as poor plots and an absence of truly inspired writing has been dwindling. Spelling and grammatical errors notwithstanding, I forced myself to trudge through so much unnatural, forced muck in hopes that in the end, it'd be a good read. So many times, I felt disappointed and empty. My point is, ho-ly shit! I burst out laughing, half cried/half strangled-laughed, and smiled so much through this wonderful little story...words can't describe how much you've just made my day. Anywho, just thought I'd let you know how much I enjoyed your writing and that this story is pretty much the shit and the stuff that movie producers wished their rom-coms were made of.

This was AMAZING! You are SO talented! HOw dare you say you're not! Oh, i just drool over Shane! Luv the ending, and you rock, LOL :D