Reviews for The Hittite and The Egyptian
Nor chapter 1 . 5/29/2014
I applaud you on your chosen subject, not many know or write about The Hittite's...I found your story through a search I was doing about the era, You obviously know your share of history...I just found some bits distracting.

-Wearing Kohl on her face? ( Kohl is always drawn in/around the eyes.)

-The scene where she bumps the man seemed a bit confusing to me, perhaps if you addressed the characters? 'The stall-keeper shook her as he attempted to look the brave knight infront of the nobleman.' or something of the sort.

All in all props on the originality of the timeline, with a few rewrites this would glow. :)
Luis chapter 1 . 9/4/2011
This is incredibly written. It's extremely rare that you have historical fiction. It is even rarer to have good historical fiction and much more so than it involves usually ignored characters such as Ramases II and the Hittites. You did a good job with this.


Can you join us? It would be cool if you did.
The Scarlet Maiden chapter 1 . 8/29/2011
Is this based from actual historical people? Or is this purely fictional?
Guest chapter 1 . 8/29/2011
Very well written! Well done.