Reviews for forewordplay
Erysimum chapter 1 . 10/31/2011
There is so much palpable emotion in this poem. Regret and uncertainty, and I loved the line 'the texture of silence': it sums up perfectly the way unspoken words we know we ought to say become physical, more solid, the longer you leave them. If that makes any sense. And the last two lines made it for me.
becquerel chapter 1 . 9/17/2011
i really like this, the idea, the concept. it really speaks to the audience. i especially enjoyed the title and last two lines.

all in all, great work. do keep it up.
lymli chapter 1 . 9/5/2011
everybody gets afraid of that :) cool poem.
short circuit chapter 1 . 9/5/2011
I love the punniness of this and the repetition of the last two lines with subtle changes of meaning from punctuation. Love the shiraz. :)

Just found your poetry and it's brilliant.
Sepulchred chapter 1 . 9/4/2011
There are so many things I love about this. I love how you've squeezed so much meaning into so few words, and I love the meshing of fore- and wordplay. I love how you've associated pride with cannibalism, because I've never thought about it that way, but it makes SO much sense. I love the lines' 'my world is the taste of shiraz

and the texture of silence' - they're so beautiful and I want to steal them from you. I love the repetition at the end and the way the addition of the two commas made the two sentences so different. I love this, love this, love this, and I don't think I've ever been so enthusiastic about anything before.
cecyouyed chapter 1 . 8/31/2011
YES. You never let me down. Keep it up, love your style.
Guest chapter 1 . 8/31/2011
This is good. It's minimal but tells a story quite well.
smoke another grin chapter 1 . 8/31/2011
lovely.