|Reviews for Please Take Me Home|
| Mercyette chapter 1 . 8/12/2012
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Another good story. I'm finding that I'm really enjoying reading these.
I would have really liked to know a little more about what was going on with the family. Why were they killing innocent women who brought their child home? I would have liked to have been able to draw a conclusion on that by the end of the story. Maybe consider including that in future edits.
Also, I don't think that the page break was necessary for this story. I realize you were changing settings, but I think you could have easily described the ride to his parents house. In fact, maybe that could be a way the woman - and the reader - learn more about the twisted family? Just something to consider...