Reviews for Undisclosed Desire: Part II Love & War
fanfictioner chapter 13 . 8/15/2012
I've been on fanfiction for years and I just heard about fictionpress. Undisclosed Desire was the first story I clicked.

After reading part I, I just HAD to read part II.
Two words to describe this... Beyond amazing.

I'll definitely be checking back to see if you updated.

Keep at it, please! (:
Guest chapter 13 . 8/14/2012
Well done. I'm crying that Pandia gets to experience true love in her life.
BettyBoo chapter 10 . 5/19/2012
awww i have missed this story! it was short and sweet, clearly showing the feelings between Hector and Dia are getting stronger - and "obvious" for Bellona. i wonder if she will able to keep her face straight when Ares asks her about Dia because he will, lol! hope you're good and will update soon! )
BettyBoo chapter 9 . 4/14/2012
hell yeah, you go and get the man you want Pandia! brilliant update - thank you!
sandra chapter 8 . 4/9/2012
Good chapter. Can't wait for the next one..Update soon please
BettyBoo chapter 8 . 3/26/2012
awww this chapter was a tease, lol! but i'm glad Hector & Pandia got some one-on-one time. the night is still young so who knows how it will end - thanks the update! look forward to upcoming ones!
BettyBoo chapter 7 . 3/26/2012
okay, i'm falling more and more in love with Hector - damn, i got to say i admire Pandia control of herself...wonder how long that is going to last, lol!

other than that i like the relationship and feelings growing between Hector and Pandia. it's real cute and nice. it's easy to understand this is their first time falling in love - again, another great update! thank you!
BettyBoo chapter 6 . 3/26/2012
dammit Ares...! just when i finally decided to wash my hands off Ares he goes and says: "Because I've missed you Pandia," there he said the words that he had been reluctant to say out and accepted for five months. nad follows that with: "How can you miss someone that you don't even love?"

"No…I do love you with everything in me," he said

"Then why pushed me away…why hurt me in so many terrible ways…why try to make me hate you,"

"So I wouldn't love you…" he pushed a strain of hair from her face as he looked at her.

and then the end: "Ares…"

"No…this time I'm not going to waste this dream and wake up," he said as he kissed her as she returned the kiss...

that was really beautifully written. it showed a side that Ares stubbornly tries to hide...a side i think is going to FLIIIP when he leans around Hector & Pandia which serves him right! *snickers* great update! thank you!
BettyBoo chapter 4 . 3/26/2012
oh oh oh...! is that competition that i see, hahahaha about time! yaaay! i hope Hector proves to be a real good guy. Pandia really deserves some happiness too!
SilentFearUnleashed chapter 7 . 3/10/2012
Really love this story. Hope you update soon.
RANDOM1 chapter 6 . 2/2/2012
Yay, an update!

Awww, cliff hanger...

I really want to know what happens in this twisted tail :)

Please update soon.


ILoveAres chapter 5 . 12/25/2011
3 love it update... soon!
ThatDancerChick chapter 1 . 11/28/2011
I love this story. Please update soon!
Furry McKrill chapter 4 . 10/28/2011
Love the story, please update
Random1 chapter 3 . 10/7/2011
yay i like this series however you should really get a beta for part 1 and this one too to correct some minor mistakes and typos. other than that, GREAT JOB!
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