The first verse was awesome, I loved it. But the second verse was a little iffy. Good job!

Keep writing!

The first stanza gave me an image of blood dripping out of one's mouth. The second stanza gave me an image of a dark closet full of shadows. Not sure that makes sense... obviously, you can't have shadows in the dark... but I guess there's like just enough moon light.

I really liked this poem. Keep on writing :)

This is great for such a short poem. It rly reminds me of a goth rap or an early linkin park chorus. I think you should focus on something like that, would deffinatly love to read a new song. Especially by you )