Reviews for Feasible or Unsustainable
AppleCrumble chapter 1 . 4/4/2012
Brilliant, as always. YOU ARE AMAZING! I loved the words you used to make it so amazing and how you made it flow and every line fitted together like a puzzle. Brilliant!
Undiscovered-Creations chapter 1 . 10/9/2011
This was a truly unique poem.

I loved this one.

It reminds me of a maze almost. In a darker setting, maybe just before dusk.

Beautiful!
uniquely-unique chapter 1 . 9/9/2011
I like this one immensely. )

You wrote the words so that they came across quite interestingly.

The only thing I would suggest changing is this set of words:

"But you haven't even fallen cold

Nothing has hit you

Except that cold air

Blocking you out cold

Without the heat"

All the "colds" are a little repetitive. Maybe if you said "frigid air" instead, it would divide it up a bit.

That was the only thing that stood out to me. Other than that I loved it!

BrittBritt
Mylilblackpen chapter 1 . 9/8/2011
I don't know whether to cheer or cry...is the person who defy the odds ok? This is so sad yet true because people do that. I love your use of words and I think this so relates to me right now! Just amazing...it really is

Gonna favourite right now...
Eleantris chapter 1 . 9/8/2011
I love this. The wording really put across the spirit of the poem, and it spoke to me. Brilliant work!

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