|Reviews for ex lover|
| creating.myself chapter 1 . 9/11/2011
Wow - I really like this poem. It speaks to me because I have experienced letting someone in, a manipulative, abusive person - only to have them hurt me time after time. ...Damn. You hit the nail on the head. I feel like this is the perfect description of certain people The feeling dirty - the sucking of life and energy - the fact that the person knows just how to manipulate you - your vulnerability - everything is just right. Everything.
I am curious though, what was the reason you wrote "touch" like you did? I have seen other authors do similar things and I confess I don't understand it.
Also, I appreciate the way you used capitalization - with the word touch, and the word Dirty...it really is great. If I were to suggest anything, it would just be to capitalize the your I's, to show that you are the one in control of the situation now - that you are powerful and will no longer let him hurt you - he no longer has that option.
But damn. You really hit home. I love it. Thank you, thank you, thank you.