Reviews for Dad
XXXSyxAdeleXXX chapter 1 . 5/11/2012
I really liked your straight forward opening of the it was straight in to the action not wasting any time thus not loosing interest and making it easy to read.I also liked the basicality( Yes, I know that's technically not a word)of your plot line. Its simplicity made it realatable to everyday life and everyday readers making it more I did slighly dislike your structure it did have a good pattern with rhythm but a few lines where the syllables were greatly uneven faulting your rhythm a little. But overall a great effort and a moving poem XXXX

Keep it up

Syxadele
LJotham chapter 1 . 9/15/2011
Right, so I'm reviewing this. :) I really liked the fluidity of this, and how it just went. It wasn't jarring, though the impact it has on the main character is most definitely just that. I love the contrast and imagery - well done. All in all, a gold star for you. Only thing I maybe would have liked to see is for the poem to find the man in his old age, but otherwise, I've no complaints :)