|Reviews for on the way to the grocery store|
| LovelySocks chapter 1 . 9/15/2012
Oh...that was beautiful. Once again, your imagery and use of phrases leaves me really thinking about what I just read. I feel genuinely like I heard the emotion in your words. Personally, I think your third paragraph was where the piece really started shaping up, and it finished off cleanly in the end. The last few sentences provided a nice wrap-up, with some food for thought. You quite clearly have an amazing talent for conveying human emotions and feelings through words and metaphors. However, I don't know how well the "no capitilization" thing worked out for this selection. Usually that works best for poems and stuff, but it's the author's vision that matters. Anyway, yet another fantastic read.
| Miryo chapter 1 . 9/14/2011
I liked this a lot, but the lack of capitalization was a bit distracting.