Reviews for The Daughter
my poor toaster chapter 1 . 11/13/2011
Chilling...

My sisters name was Holly.
Devlin Saints chapter 1 . 10/18/2011
Alright, Im sure if you had some spare time you would fix all your mistakes, So... I'll just talk about the story.

The BAD;

I didnt get that they were alone when she started strangling the daughter. I thought they were still at the funeral.

The GOOD;

I love the way your story started, and I dont say this much with Short stories but... I kinda wish it was longer. I think more examples of why the BRAT is 'the BRAT' would better serve your story in the end. The ending is morbid and quick., I dont know wether someone would say thats a good thing or bad, but I liked it, and the irony hit me pretty hard, and I liked that, too.
Miryo chapter 1 . 9/19/2011
It's fun to see a story from the "wicked step-mother"'s point of view once in a while.

I did spot a few errors, though.

- I could be called the eptiome of the evil stepmother, do to the fact I hate my stepdaughter.

"Do" should be "due".

- "I want you gone!" she screams.

"Screams" should be "screamed", since everything else is told in past-tense.

- I had tried this before and it never succeded.

"Succeded" should be "succeeded".

Very creepy ending. Looks like wicked step-mothers can NEVER catch a break. Great story.