Reviews for Empty Days
Dark Blue Lover chapter 1 . 11/25/2011
This is so sad, touching, but definitely pretty, and somehow relatable. I especially like the end - kind of comforting. "I'll hear you... whisper in the wind... on empty days." 3

Great job! Keep writing :)
AppleCrumble chapter 1 . 9/27/2011
I love this its so good and so touching, it is really well written! I really like this peice.
SomeRandomScribbles chapter 1 . 9/24/2011
Beautiful piece - I especially loved the lines, "Whisper in the wind/ On empty days". A really powerful bit of writing.

Point for improvement: this might be more effective if you put it into stanzas. Forgive me for putting the whole thing, but might I suggest -

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As years drag on,

While I wait

Tears fall

Hearts break

But I know why you fell

And I'm sorry it was you

I'll miss your smile

And old-fashioned sayings

The warmth in your hugs

The wisdom in your eyes

I'll miss those stories of black and white

When I close my eyes

As raindrops fall

I hear you…

I'll hear you

Whisper in the wind

On empty days

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For me, that would help collect it all together and highlight the individual bits. The writing is so good that some improved structure might really help it shine :)
BookcraZzaY chapter 1 . 9/22/2011
this is a truly beautiful and national AND DEFIANTLY ONE OF THE BEST POEMS EVER!