Reviews for Empty Days
Dark Blue Lover chapter 1 . 11/25/2011
This is so sad, touching, but definitely pretty, and somehow relatable. I especially like the end - kind of comforting. "I'll hear you... whisper in the wind... on empty days." 3

Great job! Keep writing :)
AppleCrumble chapter 1 . 9/27/2011
I love this its so good and so touching, it is really well written! I really like this peice.
SomeRandomScribbles chapter 1 . 9/24/2011
Beautiful piece - I especially loved the lines, "Whisper in the wind/ On empty days". A really powerful bit of writing.

Point for improvement: this might be more effective if you put it into stanzas. Forgive me for putting the whole thing, but might I suggest -


As years drag on,

While I wait

Tears fall

Hearts break

But I know why you fell

And I'm sorry it was you

I'll miss your smile

And old-fashioned sayings

The warmth in your hugs

The wisdom in your eyes

I'll miss those stories of black and white

When I close my eyes

As raindrops fall

I hear you…

I'll hear you

Whisper in the wind

On empty days


For me, that would help collect it all together and highlight the individual bits. The writing is so good that some improved structure might really help it shine :)
BookcraZzaY chapter 1 . 9/22/2011
this is a truly beautiful and national AND DEFIANTLY ONE OF THE BEST POEMS EVER!