HAHA I love it :) I like how you built into the ending conclusion about 1) how old Austin is and 2) What is he really doing/looking at? I thought you had a few sentences that were very well put together and had very good word choice. For example: "with his red nose that gleamed bright on a stark white face and that constant smile that's thrown off by the single, never changing, black teardrop"

The only real criticism I have is that some of the sentences are a little lengthy and it might flow a tiny bit better if they were turned into two sentences instead of one long one. For example: "As he watched happy kids flock his tormentor, Austin could only hear his mother's voice telling him that trying to get one of the bright creations for himself would only be a waste of their time, and what would he do with one of those ridiculous things anyways?"