Reviews for Calder: The Renovation of a Paradigm: June 2015
Vivace.Assai chapter 1 . 3/24/2012
I loved this story so much.

I loved how you interspersed the description of the lightning within the dialogue and all the actions. It made it not feel imagery heavy at any one section while still providing the readers with an excellent sense of what is happening around the characters. And that definitely made the scene more intense.

I loved how you characterized Calder's character in this story. How he repeated all of these scientific facts while his parents are worrying over him. How he acted rather calmly about being struck by lightning. His reaction what happened showed so much about his calm and logical personality. This story really allowed Calder's personality to shine.

The ending was rather abrupt and slightly confusing. However, it did nicely end the story with this sense of serenity despite the storm.

Overall great story. This must be my favorite after Revenge.

Thanks for sharing this great story!

Signing off...