Reviews for Shorts Shorts and More Shorts
Terracesofhope chapter 1 . 5/1/2012
When you enter with so many characters... Although 4 isn't much when you're talking about a circle of friends, it's a bit difficult to keep track of them without enough individual characterization. You had plenty, I just had to pay a little more attention than usual... I understand Alyssa and the narrator the most.

Whenever I read light stories like these, they seem to be almost directly based off of real people, and while real people are great sources of character, characters should be more exagerrated than their counterparts. You're great with humor.

The piece is good. It's funny, and the interactions between the characters is believeable, unique, and interesting.
Dhani Cauldwell chapter 1 . 10/2/2011
Not too bad. There were a few spelling errors (probably not caught by spellcheck because they were actual words). I like that your characters are quirky and fresh. Good job.

-Dhani

P.S. Would you mind reviewing my story? I love getting feedback. :)