Reviews for Jaded
SynThePriest chapter 1 . 10/4/2011
I like how you started off your story, hope you will go on...

Verai chapter 1 . 10/4/2011
I'd have to agree with heartofmywords. It has alot of appeal to it and I've gotta ask the same question, is there more to this?
heartofmywords chapter 1 . 10/4/2011
Wow. That's all I can say. The picture this story paints is achingly tragic - and yet almost loving. In only a few words, you have created a image of what this might be, leaving just enough mystery to keep a reader wondering and pondering the meaning...

Is there more to this? Because I would definitely like to see more.
Boreeeed chapter 1 . 10/3/2011
Wow, this is really good! I was wondering if you could read and review my story called "Closed Doors Wanting to be Opened" I would really appreciate it!
physics223 chapter 1 . 10/3/2011
It's a decent start. You can do better with less adjectives and more imagery, although I myself am a victim of that sometimes.

If you have time, please review my one-shot, The Quiz Bowl. Thanks!