|Reviews for Undulating Disdain|
| Guest chapter 2 . 10/14/2011
This is so good, I find myself relating to it a lot, which is the aim most of the time with writers! :)
The title is cool, coincidently, j'ai mal á la tête from all of my French homework.
| SmashedIce.X chapter 1 . 10/4/2011
This is incredibly well written!
'into saturated hydrogen di-
ox-I'd never imagine a dream as immense as this' - So clever! :)
| ForThoseNotBreathing chapter 1 . 10/3/2011
"but boundaries are flexible,
and I'll push the railing, till I fall to death."
"No one ever told me
why taking risks never paid off.
No one wanted to admit they're liars."
A brilliant set of lines! I broke them up, because I thought they deserved individual recognition. I love the idea you've conveyed of falling because of pushing, and this physical barrier.
And that's a beautiful way to put it. Because it's true. People don't want to lose face over admitting they lied, no matter what it's about, especially when it's about false hope.
"saturated hydrogen di-
ox-I'd never imagine a dream as immense as this
or a face as acutely void and vacuous as yours."
That was bloody well done :) Seriously, amazing imagery, and the use of combining yourself with a gas.
Just an overall beautiful piece. It developed into this web of ideas and emotions, conveyed with just the right words and descriptions. Great writing :)