Reviews for What I wish
SwimmingThroughExistance chapter 1 . 4/8/2012
this has me hyperventilating... WTH cant this ever happen in real life?lol... good story, one of my favourites cos i relate:D
HNiji chapter 1 . 3/13/2012
OMG ARE YOU SOME TYPE OF MIND READER? I was having that same fantasy! Surprise, flowers and all!
jennah3tears chapter 1 . 10/15/2011
I really enjoyed this. There were a few typo's, but nothing major. It's very cute and romantical!
Violet-Revenge chapter 1 . 10/14/2011
Completely my type of story :)

I love how it all worked out perfectly, even the flowers :)

And how you described their past within it, like the crooked nose and everything :)

Loved it :)
InfinityChaos chapter 1 . 10/13/2011
Well, that was sweet.

I liked it a lot.

It was just short enough, but not too long.

The guy you described kinda reminds me of my ex, oddly enough.

But, the story brought a smile to my face.

I was planning to check it out in the morning, but I clicked on it then read one sentence, then just read all of it. Hah,

Good job, I liked it(:

It's got that, deeper feeling that I wanted in my story, but just recently going through a break up, I didn't really have it in me to write feeling like that, but this I liked.

And I've now said that, three times?

Well yeah, I'll hush now, and tomorrow, I'll read the rest of your things, I like your style.

FreedomofWriting chapter 1 . 10/13/2011
aww a happy ending. This was quite a sweet story. I think we all have those moments where we imagine what we'd like to have happen only for something else to take place, usually the dream is nicer though. I'm glad in this case it worked out for her though.

It was sweet and well written.

There was one sentences I read a few times trying to figure out how exactly you meant it:

Then I'd go on to say how I've loved you for a long time but it wasn't until you weren't there sharing every moment with me that I realized I wanted you to be.

I guess it's meant to refer to him wanting her to be there every moment? but it's a bit unclear what he wants her to be.

Also I've noticed a few missing commas here and there. In the above one there should a comma before sharing for example. There were a few occasions like that through out the story.

Other than that well written!
recklessly abandoned chapter 1 . 10/12/2011
I really liked this story. I thought is was super sweet and I could totally connect with the main character when she was talking about her childhood friend. I also thought it was cool how the beginning was kind of like a story within a story. I'm glad your character got her happy ending 8D *thumbs up*
Miryo chapter 1 . 10/6/2011
Aw, that was cute. I like that what she imagined didn't happen, but she ended up just as happy in the end. It just goes to show how life can be unexpected, but in a good way. Nice job.