Reviews for Rollercoaster Ride
YasuRan chapter 1 . 4/26/2012
Concrit:

'And all through it all' - only one 'all' is needed. Either 'and all through it' or 'and through it all'

'But, it's real' - no comma needed here.

Overall, a decent poem. It seemed sincere and some of the parallels with roller-coaster rides were nice to visualize.
XxXKristie MarieXxX chapter 1 . 4/26/2012
Wonderfully put. Many if not all readers can relate to almost everything you post. Absolutly love it. My favorite line is 'So will you love me forever? On this rollercoaster ride That is life?' love it. :) Adding to my C2 if you don't mind :)

XxXKristie MarieXxX
Laoch chapter 1 . 10/16/2011
There was true emotion in this, it was easy to see, and it truly brought things together. I enjoyed how it seems to question without actually asking questions, something that is not as easy as it seems to write.

I did however find that the lack of stanzas almost shortened this. It came off to me as though it was written for a few different and seperate parts but was just rolled together. I also thought the last line would do better as 'Is this life?' so you could finally ask the silent question.

A discriptive poem; truthful and emotionful.

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Punslinger chapter 1 . 10/8/2011
"On this rollercoaster ride/That is life?" That's a good allegory. And when we add all the emotional tumbles of love, it makes you wonder what's so amusing about an amusement park.