So, the plot is good. So are the characters.. for the most part. I feel as if Ko should be training to be this powerful, not just.. be this powerful. It's the one thing I've noticed so far. He's young and inexperienced yet he takes down so many trained guards, you know? It's not realistic. Other than that, it's a great story! Very well written.

Gahhh, i just realized that i left a bunch of weird side notes in this story...sigh...well i am currently reworking this story so ill be sure to take those out of the next version :)
sorry about that

This better not be the end! Best dory I've read by far!

I'm totally loving this story! Please update soon. Keep up the great work! :)

Looking good! More please! ]

Sorry again for the major changes...i kinda lost where i was going with the last version lol...hope this one will still keep your interest! )

A bit short, and you need to indent when a new line of dialogue starts, but otherwise pretty good. Those kids do have the worst luck, huh? Very sad.

:)

All I have to say is u better write more cuz this is an excellent start