Reviews for Red Wine and Inner Truths |
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![]() ![]() ![]() Nice. U should do this more often. Okay, now did tht horrible feeling go away? If not, I can kick it, if u want? Wait, tht means I'm gonna kick you. I'm not gonna kick u cuz u write amazing stories like this and tht genie story. U should write more. 'Kay tht's all I guess. Love you. GooD-LucK! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Nice oneshot here! Another one of my favorites. ) I've always found romance between bestfriends a little cheesy (I preferred sworn enemies), but I really loved this one! ) Especially when Kate's mom interrupted their googly eyes at the driveway. ) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Cute! Cute! Cute! |
![]() ![]() That was sweet:-) I liked it! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I like Kate's personality! It's one of those fiery ones that make you like her a lot. ;) |
![]() ![]() That was cute! I liked how Kate, while at times abrasive, still seemed to have a comeback for everything (even while halfway drunk). Felix was likable, if a bit bland, but for some reason, I liked him better than Kate. I wish there was more development between the two of them, more hints as to why they were drawn to each other. A lot can happen in six years and it would be swell if we got to see more of what might have caused things to develop between them. It's not nice to leave a reader hanging after a line like: "She knows you, Felix, and she knows we do some pretty weird shit sometimes." Now I'm curious as to what "pretty weird shit" could entail for someone as straitlaced as Felix Kink (kudos to the ironic name, by the way). Not really a critique, but I wasn't very sure how old they were. I think you might have said that Kate was looking forward to going to college in the fall, so I'm guessing they're just newly graduated high school seniors. Just putting it out there: going through high school together seems like a ripe place to start to dig for fond memories/reasons for infatuation! Also, your vocab was pretty impressive, though using too many of those awesome verbs right after another can make a scene feel too crowded. You got better towards the end when Kate and Felix had a little dialogue without any of the "I moaned, he laughed" business. I really did like the idea of this one-shot! Your characterization was solid; I found it awesome that I could tell who Kate and Felix were, instead of having them blend together in a jumbled mess, which I have seen happen. You also have a good ear for dialogue, which I also found awesome, since oftentimes conversation can sound stilted, especially between two teenage characters. All in all, awesome stuff! Keep writing, keep working at it. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I was smiling the whole time I was reading this. But you probably already know how good this story was with 22 (now 23) reviews up your sleeve. Call me crazy, but I wish my friends would be crazy enough to this, too! |
![]() ![]() ![]() haha cute! XD |
![]() ![]() ![]() brilliant! absolutely wicked awesome! write more:) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Felix is adorable! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Eeee! So cute! I loved this story, hope you continue to write! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I hope this review saves you from any depressing disappointment etched deep within your soul! :P I enjoyed this one-shot! I wished we can see more development between Felix and and Kate but overall I suppose it was alright... o |
![]() ![]() Really cute! Love it! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Such a cute oneshot! Je l'adore! I know the story's cliche, but you managed to put your own spin on it, and that makes it awesome. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Very nice light read :) |