LOL i so love her comments toward the end with the oxygen absorption through pores and 'the nose'. Hahaha XD

Great chapter can't wait for the next

I really enjoyed the set up for this story so far! My only gripe (it wasn't much though) was that you basically repeated the same thing that the main character's life was a cliché. Just that it was stated differently.

However, I highly doubt it would be mentioned much in the next chapters so it's no big deal and almost meaningless to point this out... Anyways! Love what'cha got and can't wait for more! :)

Great. When you said 'Lacy' in the middle of Kelly and Leah's conversation; what did that mean?

LOL! Great, I plan on reading more!

I like the story line...but i don't think i like mia

sorry :(

this is good keep it up!

good chapter

keep up the good work :)

This is good. You've got some good fast-paced dialogue and witty humor with a bite in here. Nice job.

lol a great first chapter XD

Good start! You had some mistakes with punctuation and few missing words but you can always just go back and fix those if you want. Other than that, I really liked the plot and I can't wait to see where you take it! Update soon!

...this seems like its gonna get really messy...no girl who's a good friend will try to get in the way between her best friend and her boyfriend, especially if she thinks they are happy together...I'm assuming the other girl Kelsey will be the one that acts as a buffer for everything, at the same time this will get really messy when Kelsey finds out that the main girl -did you say her name?- is also in love with Ben...not saying that it will be bad, but it will easily become a WTF in a bad way...good luck can't wait to see how you will spin it