Reviews for Traffic
dokidokipanic chapter 1 . 8/5/2012
as usually ace job!
werberman chapter 1 . 12/10/2011
Honestly, I found this refreshing. You painted a hauntingly beautiful picture with words. I can't help but wonder if the ending could be made more effective if there were stops or pauses written into it, such as in the form of a semi-colon or a mere comma. I'm no expert, but when the poetry doesn't rhyme, sometimes (like in your last paragraph) adding a bit of structure gives it more flow and feeling.

Just a suggestion though.
Little girl Big world chapter 1 . 11/20/2011
Wow that was so great to read. I feel like I could read this a hundred times and get something different out of it every time. I love when I come across poetry like that. Wonderfully written.
recycle rhymes chapter 1 . 11/16/2011
I really like the traffic light metaphor and the last line had a punch to it.
qubed chapter 1 . 10/29/2011
There is so much power, here. Your metaphors are like punches; some swift, others soft, but so ultimately debilitating.

I'm in love with your words.