Reviews for The Composer a pantoum
Inkspilled chapter 1 . 10/28/2011
Wow, I liked the formatting of this, moving lines to the next stanza in a way that it never became repetitive. Really creative. Each line individually is descriptive but stands alone, so it really works well. I thought this was great. :)
Guest chapter 1 . 10/19/2011
Wow, this is really good! Structurally, it's very cleverly written, it seems to almost be like a piece of music with the repetition of lines like the repetition of notes. I don't know if you were going for that effect but it's brilliant.

Fantastic work, one of my favourites! :)
simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 10/15/2011
Review Marathon this weekend! (link in my profile)

I wouldn't punctuate the end with a period since you didn't punctuate the rest of it.

I liked the piece though. The format was great and the repetition of the lines didn't seem repetitive because you did something different with them each time. The only thing is in the second stanza starting all three of those lines with The seemed a bit repetitive, but that's just me being nitpicky. I also liked all the different characters you brought into the piece.