Reviews for School Warriors: A Simple Delinquent Story
Clear World chapter 9 . 8/17/2014
Okay, nice filler. I literally mean filler. If this was a show, this would be seen as filler so bad.

Though, a little filler never hurts to have. I believe that's the quote that was spoken. I don't remember, but that's what I'm using. It's filler and its just supposed to be fun. Now this is more in line in what I was thinking.

Oh also, oh wow, so that's the end of the second arc. Okay. That was a dragging ending. I mean, 2 entire chapters of concluding the arc when the battle ended at chapter 7. Gosh, way to pad it out (joking here).
Clear World chapter 8 . 8/17/2014
Okay... I reallyy don't have much to say about this chapter. It's a nice conversation...I guess? I still don't have that much of a personal investment with Shiva or even Akemi, so... I guess I like them more now compared to what I felt before this chapter, but that's not saying much. Though, what should I be expecting with the little amount of screen time Akemi gets (if that ever).

I might as well just look at how many girls actually exist in this story and talk about other things, but... I really got nothign to say. I guess her backstory was... sad? I don't know. It was just really out of nowhere and if anything felt forced. I just hope it actually becomes a factor later in the story or else this entire scene would feel pointless to me.

Maybe I should caring more about their relationship, but what should i care about their relationship. This is basically the biggest thing they have done together... so, that's a thing. Yeah, other than my common annoyances, I got nothing much else to say but...

Ringo just needs to tell Date what the hell she's think. I mean gosh, what is it with girls and hiding everything.
cmaej chapter 6 . 8/17/2014
(Begins in an okonomiyaki restaurant on a Sunday, as the main trio spend their weekend meetings)

Date: Hah! Just what we need, a decent meal while looking at cute waitresses! (eyes a passing waitress) Ah, we gotta live life to its fullest... (Shivamaru and Touma...Only gave him blank stares) What?

Touma: I thought we were all gay.

Shivamaru: I did, too. Now I'm confused.

Date: Well, we need to decide soon, because there's either gonna be an orgy or a brawl in a few minutes...

Shivamaru and Touma: What!?


And let the rest be your imagination. ;)
cmaej chapter 5 . 8/17/2014
Yamagata: Wow, I never realize how much [love] there is between us. (chuckles) But c'mon Ishida, do you really think you three are true dreamers when we're all nothing more than men who love to [sex] each other up? (looks at Shivamaru) You remember freshmen year, right Honda?

Shivamaru: ...Yeah, as clear as ever.

Yamagata: But remember, I was your first [lover], the one who [sexed] the real Shivamaru two years ago…


Sorry, I couldn't help it. The power of changing four simple words. *w*
cmaej chapter 4 . 8/17/2014
OMG! Three manly guys enjoying the sunset on the most manly way! The bromance is so powerful, it vibrated throughout the city! OMG! I'm totally shipping Kenshin and Tatsu.

Agito: It felt like something good, alright. ;)
Darth Zannacross chapter 21 . 8/15/2014
Should have figured something like SEA would show up for a sea trip lol. Well, did not expect things to go this way but, guess even something as heated as this could use some downtime.

Oh well, nice Star Wars reference lol.
Darth Zannacross chapter 20 . 8/15/2014
Well, things are escalating all right, more team building and what not. Well, gang politics are tricky indeed. However, it remands to be seen if things will remain stable.
Darth Zannacross chapter 19 . 8/15/2014
Well, that was a rather intense clash, lived up to its title at least. So, a few surprises were laid out in the brawl. And so with this victory from here, we will see where it goes?
Darth Zannacross chapter 18 . 8/15/2014
Well, the battle did explode all right. Though, it seems that the bad meal brought more tension then the fight lol. But, from that a even bigger storm is coming, we will see how the clash of the Luck Breakers and Big Shot gangs go.
Clear World chapter 7 . 8/14/2014
*very slow clap*

What is there to say about a epic battle shrunk into one chapter, except there being an epic battle all condensed into 1 chapter. Made very convenient for a read on the bus.

Screw logic, just enjoy the epic battle and it's epic-ness because down the line, it's going to get topped (I suspect in like 2 chapters).

For the change of heart of the other gangs, i have no comment for them because if I did, it wouldn't be nice things and I would breaking their kneecaps with a baseball bat. I read that somewhere, in fact, i believe that was in the last chapter. Because real men don't do it with their heart, they do it with their actions and beating the crap out of people. REAL MEN.
Darth Zannacross chapter 17 . 8/14/2014
In a battle of Sharks VS Dolphins, normally I would give it to Sharks, unless the Dolphins were trained , then, the Sharks would stand no chance. Meanwhile, Butcher is rather vicious, though not quite as much as the name would imply lol.

So, things were a little more easier to read at this point , that was nice.

So, getting to be quite a party now, we will see where it goes from here.
Darth Zannacross chapter 16 . 8/14/2014
I don't know if eyepatches are in fact a chick magnet, I guess it varies, could be a sigh of danger lol. Well, just good for everyone this is not the same Kurama from Yu Yu Hakuso or there would be a lot more people on the verge of death. Well, more banter and, stuff.
Darth Zannacross chapter 15 . 8/14/2014
Ah, we got a throw down in here, seemed rather nice. It was quite a grudge match, but thankfully it did not end in to brutal a manner. Well, now. more turf wars I suppose.
Darth Zannacross chapter 14 . 8/14/2014
Shivamaur knows how to rally a group, he should go in to politics. So, more planning for stuff, eh.
Clear World chapter 6 . 8/14/2014
Cant believe Im saying this, but, my exceptations for this story was vastly too high and too misdirected for this story. It's not that your first few chapters built that exceptations but rather, I read your side stories first which made this story seem rather tame and kind of dull in comparison. I think it's safe Even with that fight scene between the three idiots and Yamagata's possie was rather lackluster compared to that 8 chapter long epic insane battle in that cheerleading side story.

Even right now, Shivamaru isn't really not that interesting of a character for me (especiall when I know you have much more interesting characters in your story's unvierse). Date was good in his introduction, but now, I really don't notice him. Touma is so forgetable for me as well. So... these characters are not a high point for this story (for me) at the least.

As for the action, it's good for what is a scrpit. But seriously, those two don't mesh well with each other. Script is not good for showcasing fight scenes. The fight have too few things to visualize with and lacks that emotional or awesome it factor.

And one more thing, I notice I haven't even seen a classroom yet (except for that beginning). Yeah for these troublemakers. And lasting, I'm now dragging myself in reading.
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