Reviews for Where Were You?
TheGlycoprotein chapter 1 . 1/21/2012
I can relate to the feeling behind this so well. I love how it switches points of view, the second part almost accusing the first. Where were you? A question that can mean so much... or so little. Anyway, it was brilliant :)
Meadow Frost chapter 1 . 12/16/2011
I don't know what to say... It was beautiful. There we go. :-)
Lain Sheehan chapter 1 . 11/30/2011
Mr/Mrs Applecrumble :-) (I usually leave the nose out, but I thought I'd be polite)

Thanks for my reviews, I haven't been on here properly for a while, it's like a trip down memory lane, I'll have to get some new poems on...anyhoo... I really liked "Where were you" It had a sort of resentment and longing in it, but very subtle which I really liked... Also it had an awsome line in it, one sec let me have a look for it... "That same day when our lips were sealed with hope" I really love that line... I can really feel the quiet hoping from that silence when you "sealed your lips." It's beautiful, anyway damnnnn massive review... sorry xxx
Eden Green chapter 1 . 11/21/2011
Sad, but beautiful. I love the you and I concept you've implemented into your writing here. Seriously, well done!
this-is-silence chapter 1 . 10/24/2011
Great poem!

"our lips were sealed with hope" is such a unique image...

After it changes pov, there is such emotion...really wonderful.

Interesting turn at the end...
Mylilblackpen chapter 1 . 10/21/2011
Such a sad yet beautiful poem and I think you could relate it to the 9/11 tragedy anymore :( beautiful poem and I loved it!
Dark Blue Lover chapter 1 . 10/21/2011
I love the contrast between those two parts. "Where were you...?" "But I was there". So very, very, very relatable.

"Lips sealed with hope" 3

I was wondering a little what the situation should be. The atmosphere in this poem very clear, but I must admit I can't really see the situation it's set in, so it stays a little abstract to me.

A few punctuation mistakes ("And it was my hands, which were clasped in prayer" remove the comma; "I watched you, as your tears fell and my heart broke" think it should be: "I watched you as your tears fell, and my heart broke".)

Still, good job; I really like this one!
BookcraZzaY chapter 1 . 10/20/2011
Heartbreakers I can take magical I feel heartbroken just from reading this