|Reviews for Elsie's Vampire|
| Sekhmib chapter 1 . 1/14/2013
Your chapters need to be longer! This sounds pretty interesting. Though you should re-read before you post. I had a bit of a hard time understanding until I re-red it myself. You have a lot of spelling mishaps and grammatical mistakes. When someone is talking you have to put some space or quotations around it so we know when they are talking. I couldn't at first tell.