|Reviews for Darling|
| zanybellecloudo chapter 3 . 8/8
Oh, its quickly becoming sinister and dark. An interesting concept and again great way of storytelling. You're a talented writer.
| zanybellecloudo chapter 1 . 8/8
This is a great writing style of letter/storytelling. I think you convey the emotions of the wife very well - a mix of searching for hope and undoubtedly intense fear. I assume this is zombies or a virus? The fast pace makes it an easy piece of work to follow. Thanks for sharing!
| TooLazyTooMakeAnAccount chapter 16 . 2/11/2012
It's a good story. The only thing that ruined it for me is him replying. How could he? The post office doesn't run over Christmas. So I doubt it'd run during a zombie apocalypse. And how would she post letters anyway? It would mean venturing outside.
Like she said, she is barricaded in for safety.
Maybe there is a zombie mailman lol.
Very well written though. I think if it was just her writing to him or in a diary it would definitely work better.
Then again. Maybe he never did reply, maybe she just wants that to be true and so imagines it. Like the family being sure the mother is in the bedroom praying despite having buried her
| Within My Veins chapter 26 . 12/20/2011
It's an interesting take on faith. The atmosphere here is dark too...
| dawnita chapter 26 . 12/16/2011
wow. i can't believe this is the last chapter!
and as always, you did an amazing job of writing ... the ending was A.M.A.Z.I.N.G. it totally made me feel like i was right there, next to Margaret waiting for the zombies to come in ... it's really sad that her husband's gone.
this was amazing. i love your story. thank you so much for sharing it :)
P.S. i'm sorry i wasn't able to read and review for a long time ... it's our Prelims and i need to catch up with a lot of my subjects ...
| Inkspilled chapter 26 . 12/8/2011
I think the ending definitely suited the whole story. I liked the idea of her running out of orchid stamps, going back to the first chapter. I did have an issue with her just sitting there and writing, even describing what was happening. I do feel like it's hard to write ending's like these without a third person narrator being able to describe the state of the letter (bloodstained, blurred with tears) or include some outside information. It's hard to believe she would sit there and just write, all whilst still being sane. In reality the letters would have ended somewhere inconclusive. That's just my opinion. Again, thanks for the eerie and interesting read! :)
| dawnita chapter 25 . 12/6/2011
i hope that her husband will have faith soon. yeah, i guess the father is a zombie now too ...
um, i think that you have some typographical errors, you keep saying 'I' instead of 'in'
update soon, please :)
| dawnita chapter 24 . 12/6/2011
i like how she talks about death like it's not something to be afraid of. i love that she is more steadfast with her faith
| dawnita chapter 23 . 12/6/2011
whoa, i did not expect that. poor girl! that guy's creepy! Margaret should get out of there!
| Inkspilled chapter 25 . 12/2/2011
This being a horror story, I find the progression of events to be predictable. But that doesn't stop the sensation of dawning horror every time something happens. I'm interested in seeing how this will end.
| Inkspilled chapter 23 . 12/2/2011
There are definitely spelling errors here and there, you should use spell check or just read over them a bit. It'd be easy since each chapter is really short. Also, another note is your use of the word olfactory, since olfactory essentially means smell, it's almost like you're saying "the sense of smell smell". It might be nitpicky to say so, but I noticed it in the first chapter, thought I should mention it on second thought.
| Inkspilled chapter 16 . 12/2/2011
I love the revelations in this chapter, it makes you question their sanity, especially the main character's. This could be categorized as a thriller.
| Inkspilled chapter 15 . 12/2/2011
This is so entertaining because of the eerie intermixing of declining sanity, as well as the main character's debate with religion. It's just pulling me along for the ride.
| Inkspilled chapter 1 . 12/2/2011
Interesting, it's so short but really snags your attention. I think you made this situation interesting just by context.
| Susperia chapter 23 . 11/26/2011
oh my Lord...